A hunger like no other – By Kresley Cole

a hunger

If you haven’t read this book you are missing out on a great read. The Hero is a wolf, the heroine is part vampire part valkyrie; what more could you ask for? There’s romance, fighting, blood drinking, and sex, steamy steamy sex.

I absolutely love the Hero, Lachlain. He’s been tortured by vampires for years and the only thing keeping him from going insane is the thought of his mate. Finally, one day he scents her, he knows that she is near. His desire for her makes him stronger, strong enough to escape the hell he’s been in. BUT when he finds her, he finds out that she is part vampire. Imagine his anger. But even the fact that she is a vampire cannot keep him from adoring the woman fate has gifted him with.

Loved it!

Whimsical!

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What does this dress say to you? What kind of character does it bring to mind?

When I see it, the first word that comes to mind is Whimsical. The dress makes me think of a picnic near a garden in the middle of spring. Beautiful flowers surround the young couple as the Hero stares into her eyes wondering how could someone like him be so lucky to find a girl like her. The heroine, timid and sweet; smiles shyly at him. Her heart races when he grabs her hand and brings it to his lips for a kiss. 🙂

What scene does it bring to mind for you?

xoxo Siren

Positive Feedback!!

Happy Monday, fellow writers (published and unpublished).

You are probably thinking, ‘Siren, It’s Monday. Why are you in such a good mood?’

Well i’m in a great mood because I entered a writing contest a few weeks ago, the results are now in and guess what – I LOST. 🙂

Yep you heard me correcty, I lost, I didn’t even make it to the finals.

BUT: I did receive positive feedback from one of the editors and you know what? Her feedback has helped me alot. I see places in my story that need a lot of work and places that need to be strengthened. I didn’t lose the contest because i’m a bad writer, I lost because my story was weak. The plot wasn’t heavy enough. There wasn’t enough conflict to keep my damsel and hero apart and not enough romance to bring them together.

But I love the story line of my book and I believe it can become a great story, but it’s up to me to make it a great story!

So i’m going to take the editors advice and work on it, have others read it, work on it some more – then resubmit it.

The moral of the story is: Losing is not always bad. It’s what you do with the loss that makes it bad. I plan to use my loss as motivation and work harder and study the craft of writing more.

Remember – never give up.

Have a great day all!!
xoxo Siren

Novella completed! Yay me!

I finally completed my short story. I hope the publisher loves it as much as i do. I have included a snippet from the story. It’s a paranormal Romance and very steamy. Hope you like it – feel free to comment!
xoxo Siren
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With a growl Devin picked her up and tossed her over his shoulder. Surprised was not a strong enough word to describe how Alyssa felt. She held on to his shirt as he strode to her front door and unlocked it. Devin had to bend down to avoid hitting Alyssa’s head on the top of the door as they entered her home. Devin kicked the door closed behind him not bothering to lock it.
“Where’s the bedroom?” He asked her.

When Comma’s Attack!!!!,,,

Hi all, today’s tip comes from my Daily Writing Tip emails that i receive from dailywritingtips.com. If you haven’t signed up to receive their tips you are truly missing out on some helpful information.

Today’s tip is in regards to comma usage. If you are like me, the more comma’s the better. However, our comma usage may not always be grammatically correct. Read the info below to see if you are using comma’s illegally, 🙂

5 Cases of Excessive Commas

Posted: 25 Feb 2013 08:24 PM PST

The rules about commas can seem so complicated — and contradictory — that writers can (almost) be forgiven for tossing in an extra one or two. Here are several examples of overly generous deployment of commas.

1. “If a killer asteroid was, indeed, incoming, a spacecraft could, in theory, be launched to nudge the asteroid out of Earth’s way, changing its speed and the point of intersection.”
This thirty-word sentence is littered with six commas — one for every five words — five of them appearing before the halfway point. By simply bending the rule about bracketing interjections with commas — a rule that advocates of open punctuation flout routinely anyway — the number is reduced by two, rendering the sentence more free flowing: “If a killer asteroid was indeed incoming, a spacecraft could, in theory, be launched to nudge the asteroid out of Earth’s way, changing its speed and the point of intersection.”

One more comma can be eliminated by relocating the parenthetical phrase “in theory” to an earlier position in the sentence, so that the comma after incoming does double duty: “If a killer asteroid was indeed incoming, in theory, a spacecraft could be launched to nudge the asteroid out of Earth’s way, changing its speed and the point of intersection.”

2. “The metaphor, ‘The world is a machine,’ began to replace the metaphor, ‘The world is a living organism.’”
In this sentence, the comma preceding each instance of metaphor implies that that metaphor is the only one — not just in the sentence, but anywhere. (But two metaphors are expressed here, and innumerable others exist.) Metaphor, appearing in apposition to the two brief quotations, should not be set off from them: “The metaphor ‘The world is a machine’ began to replace the metaphor ‘The world is a living organism.’”

3. “The event is part of a catchy, public health message about the importance of emergency preparedness.”
Catchy and “public health” are not coordinate adjectives. The point is not that the message is catchy and public health; it’s that the public health message is catchy. Therefore, no comma is necessary: “The event is part of a catchy public health message about the importance of emergency preparedness.”

If, by contrast, the sentence read, for example, “The event is part of a catchy, quirky message about the importance of emergency preparedness,” note that because catchy and quirky are parallel — they are coordinate adjectives — a comma should separate them.

4. “The report was completed in December, 2012.”
A comma is necessary between a month and a year only if a date is specified (“The report was completed on December 1, 2012”): “The report was completed in December 2012.” (The same rule applies when the name of a season appears in place of the name of a month: “The report was completed in fall 2012.”)

5. “Jones traveled by boxcar from California to New York with fellow fledgling artist, John Smith, sketching the American landscape along the way.”
Commas are necessary with this type of apposition only if the epithet is preceded by an article (“Jones traveled by boxcar from California to New York with a fellow fledgling artist, John Smith, sketching the American landscape along the way”): “Jones traveled by boxcar from California to New York with fellow fledgling artist John Smith sketching the American landscape along the way.” Unfortunately, this type of error has gone viral — its ubiquity is mistaken for propriety — and is seemingly ineradicable.

*****Very informative. Hope this helped someone. Happy writing!
xoxo Siren

Writing tip – Contests: To enter or not to enter!?!?!

I recently entered a writing contest and lost. 😦 I came in sixth place out of about nine people. Yeah it sucked to lose, but it was and is a learning experience. I received feedback from the judges; their critique’s were very helpful. Todays writing tip is: Enter writing contest and challenges. It helps you grow as a writer. You learn what you’re doing right and what you’re doing wrong. You may not win them all but even when you lose you gain experience as a writer. No great writer became that way the moment they put pencil to paper or hand to keyboard. They had to learn the craft and write, write, and write some more.

Hope this helps someone,
xoxo Siren

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